You’re not the one

 
       
 
Jul 10, 2018, 05:20 PM

You’re not the one
Verse
There’s truth there is deception
I’m all too aware.
What appears to be real
Sometimes isn’t there.
Thought I was in love with you.
Turns out I was wrong.
I dreamed of forever
Didn’t last that long.
Chorus
Too far from the stars, too close to the sun.
I want love I need it but you’re not the one.
Verse
It’s hopeless I am desperate
this is a fool’s way.
They buy into nonsense
sometimes lose their way.
I thought I’d found the real thing
Seems you thought so too.
You dreamed of forever
I found someone new.
Chorus
Too far from the stars, too close to the sun.
I want love I need it but you’re not the one.
Bridge
Saw a light out in the darkness.
Thought you shined for me.
When you got close to my heart.
I could not take the heat.
Verse
There’s truth there is deception
I’m all too aware.
What appears to be real
Sometimes isn’t there.
Thought I was in love with you.
Turns out I was wrong.
I dreamed of forever
Didn’t last that long.
Chorus
Too far from the stars, too close to the sun.
I want love I need it but you’re not the one.

[ Edited: 10 July 2018 05:27 PM by carroll kiphen]
 
     
carroll kiphen Joined Feb 22, 2016
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Jul 10, 2018, 05:21 PM

Should I repeat the 1st line of the chorus( too far from the stars too close to the sun and retitle this?

 
     
carroll kiphen Joined Feb 22, 2016
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Jul 11, 2018, 01:08 AM

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful.

You could repeat the first line of the chorus. I would just repeat the title: You’re Not The One. It kind of depends what goes best with the music that hopefully someone will compose.

All the best
Robert

 
     
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Robert Baitinger Joined Jun 01, 2006
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Jul 17, 2018, 12:56 AM

Hello Carroll,

Really good lyric, I like it.  Any idea of what genre you hear this in?  Best wishes,

Speak soon,

Music is an international language, say it with a song.

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Deacon Joined Aug 30, 2009
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Jul 17, 2018, 07:42 AM

Thanks, no I don’t have a genre in mind.

 
     
carroll kiphen Joined Feb 22, 2016
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