You Catch your breath and I’ll Catch your tears

 
       
 
Jul 10, 2018, 10:05 PM

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I’ve been watching you all night, the sparkel in your eyes is lost deep in thought
Staring into the nights sky hoping everything is gonna’ be all right
And I can see your thinkin’ about him, the things he did, I know he broke your heart
And baby I can’t stand to see you cry no more.


It’s the bitter cold of winter you shouldn’t be alone
Waiting outside, for some standup guy, that aint showed up yet.
While the wind keeps blowin’, the rain keeps fallin’ your sittin’ all alone soakin’ wet.
Waiting outside, for some standup guy, that ain’t showed up yet.


So why don’t you
Take my hand, take a chance, you got nothing to lose & nothing to fear
You just catch your breath, and I’ll catch your tears
You catch your breath and Ill catch your tears ers ers….
You catch your breath and Ill catch your tears


Cause id,
Id never make you have to wish upon a falling star that I won’t go.
And you’d never sit by the phone wondering when I’ll be home.
Cause…Iiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii can see everything that fool couldn’t see
The first time I saw you my heart stopped it ‘skipped, it skipped a beat, beat


So… Baby why don’t you
Take my hand, take a chance, you got nothing to lose & nothing to fear
You just catch your breath, and I’ll catch your tears
You catch your breath and I’ll catch your tears eers ers
You catch your breath and I’ll catch your tears

 

And you’ll neve rever again be
Waiting outside, for some standup guy, that aint’ showed up yet.
And the wind keeps blowin, the rain keeps fallin’ your sittin’ alone soakin’ wet.
Waiting outside, for some standup guy, that aint’ showed up yet.


So…
Baby take my hand take a chance, you got nothing to lose & nothing to fear
You just catch your breath, and I’ll catch your tears
You catch your breath and Ill catch your tears ers ers….
You catch your breath and Ill catch your tears


So… Baby
Pleeease take my hand, take a chance, you got nothing to lose & nothing to fear
You just catch your breath, and I’ll catch your tears
You catch your breath and Ill catch your tears ers ers….
You catch your breath and Ill catch your tears


Cause Baby it’s
It’s the bitter cold of winter and you shouldn’t be alone tonight
You catch your breath, and I’ll catch you tears.

 
     
September Minamora Joined Feb 21, 2009
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Jul 12, 2018, 04:48 PM

Hi September. Do you have a melody in mind for this? There’s a couple of lines that are written as if you did. (e.g. “Cause…Iiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii can see everything that fool couldn’t see”). It seems pretty wordy and not easy to fit a tune to, but if you already have one in mind, then that’s not an issue.

Personally, I’m not crazy about the words “I’ll catch your tears.” It doesn’t make sense to me. You might wipe or dry somebody’s tears, but catch them? In your hands? In a cup? Why wait for them to fall instead of drying her eyes? This might just be me overthinking it.

Also, what do you mean by a standup guy? Do you mean it postively as a guy who stands by his commitments, or are you alluding to him standing her up (not turning up for a date)?

 
     
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Gavin Sinclair Joined Dec 02, 2014
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Jul 14, 2018, 08:00 PM

First let me say thank you for your response.

To answer your questions.

Yes I have a melody in mind. 

You catch your breath, Ill catch your tears, just a play on words.
I have actually had a good response people seem to get it.

This supposed great guy,
this Standup guy is sarcastic alluding to him standing her up.

 
     
September Minamora Joined Feb 21, 2009
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