Another Shot of Whiskey

 
       
 
Aug 08, 2018, 07:39 PM

ANOTHER SHOT OF WHISKEY
By: Diron Mills

I got served today.
It’s really getting real.
Ten years tossed aside
I’m not sure how to feel.
We tried to work it out
But some rivers can’t be crossed.
She walked out of my life
And now I feel so lost.

When will the hurt subside?
When will the healing begin?
How do I move on from this
And learn to love again?
Don’t know how I can make it
Through another day like today.
So I’ll take another shot of whiskey and wait
Till the pain goes away.

I’m already six shots in
There’s no relief in sight.
Pour out the seventh one
This could take all night.
I thought we would last forever
When those around us couldn’t stand.
Now I find myself sitting here
With this bottle in my hand.

When will the hurt subside?
When will the healing begin?
How do I move on from this
And learn to love again?
Don’t know how I can make it
Through another day like today.
So I’ll take another shot of whiskey and wait
Till the pain goes away.

No one ever told me
Life could hurt so much
They never said a break up
Would be this tough.
I didn’t know lonely
Could make me feel so alone.
I never thought the whiskey
Would take this long.

When will the hurt subside?
When will the healing begin?
How do I move on from this
And learn to love again?
Don’t know how I can make it
Through another day like today.
So I’ll take another shot of whiskey and wait
Till the pain goes away.

 
     
Diron Mills Joined Aug 20, 2017
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Aug 09, 2018, 03:08 PM

Hey Diron,

There’s nothing wrong with this, but its been done so many times before that it’s hard to see how to make it seem fresh. Of course, a killer melody can make most things work, but as a lyric, I can’t help feeling it needs a unique angle.

 
     
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Gavin Sinclair Joined Dec 02, 2014
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Aug 13, 2018, 11:13 AM

I thought that lyric set cuts pretty deep. It’s true it’s been done before, but I’d say that’s always going to be the case when you tackle a theme as universal as love and lose. I agree with Gavin that a strong melody could really bring it to life, but honestly I think that with the sort of content you’re working with, the biggest key is to match the tone of the song to the emotional state that drove it. If you can stoke empathy in the listener then it won’t matter how many times that listener has heard similar tunes. Anyways, hope you’re doing alright. If things seem bleak, don’t forget they’ve been bad and then gotten better before! ... not to be cheesy or over-assume. Looking forward to hearing the song! Cheers

 
     
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Rhys Fraser Joined Jan 30, 2018
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Aug 13, 2018, 09:00 PM

Just give me a shot , and i’ll take a toke
i’ll keep buying rounds , until i’m all broke

a toke of doobie , and a shot of jack
the best to my girl, she got quite a stack


Tell me if you want more lyrics!!!!!  I’m getting pretty good at rhyming and syllable counts..

 
     
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