Need lyric collaboration

1 of 3
1
       
 
Oct 05, 2018, 08:05 AM

I’ve got this snippet of lyric for a country tune but I’m at loss as to where it should go. If you want to help complete it I’d appreciate the help.

It’s time to tune the fiddle;
rosin up the bow.
Time to find a pretty girl;
Do the Doesy doe.

I’m sitting on my bale of hay
In my best dungarees
But where are all the pretty girls?
There’s no-one here but me

Grandpa sold the tractor
Bought grandma some new teeth
Catfish fry, rhubarb pie
And a barefoot country beat

Good times with Cousin Betty
Cousins Jane and Paul
But my favorite was Daisy,
That heifer in the stall

I’m sitting on my bale of hay
In my best dungarees
But where are all the pretty girls?
There’s no-one here but me

It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle
and make a little room
to clean the barn
and watch the farm
lest Autumn end too soon.

I’ll play the fiddle anyway.
I’ll dance to my own tune.
I’ll sit and while the hours away,
Beneath a Summer moon.
It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle.

[ Edited: 13 October 2018 10:16 AM by carroll kiphen]
 
     
carroll kiphen Joined Feb 22, 2016
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 05, 2018, 09:41 AM

I think this case of writer’s block might be cured if you were to sit on a hay bale, chew some tobacco and shout yee-haw a few times. Do you own a pair of bib overalls? :)

 
     
Avatar
Gavin Sinclair Joined Dec 02, 2014
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 05, 2018, 09:53 AM

Yeah, I’m not familiar enough with that whole vibe. Should’ve watched more episodes of Hee Haw.

 
     
carroll kiphen Joined Feb 22, 2016
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 06, 2018, 11:26 AM

You both might get started by getting out of 1974.
All of that is long, long LONG dead. Write what you know and make it real. Don’t write things you don’t know anything about. Comes off silly.

 
     
Avatar
MBarne4908 Joined Jul 29, 2010
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 06, 2018, 02:32 PM

Hey MAB, I resent that. I didn’t write those lines. Besides, I’m stuck in 1976, which is totally different. :)

 
     
Avatar
Gavin Sinclair Joined Dec 02, 2014
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 07, 2018, 10:15 AM

Hey Gavin, I don’t doubt it. It is pretty funny though how people think “country is the same as what their grandparents listened to.
If you want to know what country is now, you go to rock and pop ten-fifteen years ago. The language is always direct and and uncomplicated and today’s country has more in common with rock and rap than anything in the ”Hee Haw” era. The fiddles went silent about 20 years ago and while Keith Urban brought back the banjo a bit, it is more likely to be played through a full stack Marshall now.
The Doesy no longer does and and the bow rosin have given way to very expensive trucks, drum loops, samples and heavy guitar licks.
But if you will write about life going on around you, that can be country.

 
     
Avatar
MBarne4908 Joined Jul 29, 2010
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 07, 2018, 10:49 AM

Your point is well taken, MAB. A lot of folks on forums like this seem to be obsessed with an idyllic world long gone (if it ever really existed in its pure form), all swimming holes and fishing poles, old trucks, moonshine and, of course, doesy does. The potential audience consists of ...well, mostly of other folks on forums like this. They never seem to write about the things they see and hear around them today. It seems to me that they are missing an opportunity. I’ve written songs about complications of get-togethers in the age of blended families, internet dating, the clash of cultures as the rural south changes and the difficulties faced by veterans. Not a fishing pole in sight, but they all seem country to me - just looking around and writing it down.

As for the language of today’s country songs, I was recently at a workshop by Larry Beaird at which he analyzed the top ten country songs of June 2018. They could not have been more direct and simpler. Not much of the subtlety or story-telling we associate with country songs of the past. It’s all dumbed down now. Not that the writers or performers are dumb - they know what they’re doing. I don’t think that necessarily means that everyone should write in that style. It depends on what your aims are. Frankly, not many of us are going to be writing for the top stars. I could have written those same lyrics (they are nothing special), but nobody would have recorded them. So, unless we are going to put in the years it takes to establish connections, maybe we should just write the best songs we can.

 
     
Avatar
Gavin Sinclair Joined Dec 02, 2014
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 07, 2018, 10:54 AM

It’s time to tune the fiddle;
Rosin up the bow.
Time to find a pretty girl;
Do the Doesy doe.

I’m sitting on my bale of hay
In my best dungarees
But where are all the pretty girls?
There’s no-one here but me

 
     
Avatar
Gavin Sinclair Joined Dec 02, 2014
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 07, 2018, 11:54 AM

Time To Tune The Fiddle

It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle,
Rosin up the bow.
Time to find a pretty girl;
Do the Dosey Doe.

I’m sitting on my bale of hay
In my best dungarees
Where are all the pretty girls?
There’s no-one here but me

It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle
and make a little room
to clean the barn
and watch the farm
lest Autumn end too soon.
I’ll play the fiddle anyway.
I’ll dance to my own tune.
I’ll sit and while the hours away,
Beneath a Summer moon.
It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle.

[ Edited: 07 October 2018 12:05 PM by Gary E. Andrews]

There will always be another song to be written. Someone will write it. Why not you? http://www.garyeandrews.com

 
     
Avatar
Gary E. Andrews Joined Apr 12, 2005
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 07, 2018, 12:05 PM

Nice one Gary! I think we have the makings of a lament here. The image of the man sitting in his empty barn that once echoed to music and laughter, playing his fiddle for himself is pretty poignant.

 
     
Avatar
Gavin Sinclair Joined Dec 02, 2014
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 07, 2018, 12:13 PM

The Third Verse Curse now arrives. Verse 3 should not simply do more exposition of the same ideas but something significant, a denouement to the story.

The pattern I’d repeat would be that of the first two Stanzas:

It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle, (I’d repeat this line to open, maybe this whole Stanza.)
Rosin up the bow.
Time to find a pretty girl;
Do the Dosey Doe.

(Then a new Stanza patterned after this one. Only I’d git me a purty girl to finish up satisfied!)

I’m sitting on my bale of hay (Looky there! Who should come my way?
In my best dungarees (In her best dungarees,)
Where are all the pretty girls? (Prettiest of pretty girls!)
There’s no-one here but me (There’s someone here with me!)

Looky there! Who should come my way?
In her best dungarees,
Prettiest of pretty girls!
There’s someone here with me!

It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle
and make a little room
to clean the barn
and watch the farm
lest Autumn end too soon.
I’ll play the fiddle anyway.
I’ll dance to my own tune.
We’ll sit and while the hours away,
Beneath a Summer moon.
It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle.
It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle.
It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle.

There will always be another song to be written. Someone will write it. Why not you? http://www.garyeandrews.com

 
     
Avatar
Gary E. Andrews Joined Apr 12, 2005
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 07, 2018, 12:15 PM

Time To Tune The Fiddle

It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle,
Rosin up the bow.
Time to find a pretty girl;
Do the Dosey Doe.

I’m sitting on my bale of hay
In my best dungarees
Where are all the pretty girls?
There’s no-one here but me

It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle
and make a little room
to clean the barn
and watch the farm
lest Autumn end too soon.
I’ll play the fiddle anyway.
I’ll dance to my own tune.
I’ll sit and while the hours away,
Beneath a Summer moon.
It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle.

Looky there! Who should come my way?
In her best dungarees,
Prettiest of pretty girls!
There’s someone here with me!

It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle
and make a little room
to clean the barn
and watch the farm
lest Autumn end too soon.
I’ll play the fiddle anyway.
I’ll dance to my own tune.
We’ll sit and while the hours away,
Beneath a Summer moon.
It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle.
It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle.
It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle.

There will always be another song to be written. Someone will write it. Why not you? http://www.garyeandrews.com

 
     
Avatar
Gary E. Andrews Joined Apr 12, 2005
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 07, 2018, 12:45 PM

That’s one way to go. I think I’d stick with the melancholy. If anyone appears, it should be remembered friends and family from days gone by. Something like this, although the chorus doesn’t fit quite so well in this version.


It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle,
Rosin up the bow.
Time to find a pretty girl;
Do the Dosey Doe.

I’m sitting on my bale of hay
In my best dungarees
Where are all the pretty girls?
There’s no-one here but me

It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle
and make a little room
to clean the barn
and watch the farm
lest Autumn end too soon.
I’ll play the fiddle anyway.
I’ll dance to my own tune.
I’ll sit and while the hours away,
Beneath a Summer moon.
It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle.

So many folks I know and love
And that I’ve sorely missed
See her whirl, the pretty girl
Whose lips I used to kiss

Flashing bow, tapping toe
They all come to hear
Then with the moon behind a cloud
They fade and disappear

It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle
and make a little room
to clean the barn
and watch the farm
lest Autumn end too soon.
I’ll play the fiddle anyway.
I’ll dance to my own tune.
We’ll sit and while the hours away,
Beneath a Summer moon.
It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle.
It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle.
It’s Time To Tune The Fiddle.

 
     
Avatar
Gavin Sinclair Joined Dec 02, 2014
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 07, 2018, 05:45 PM

When country got popular during our time it sounded more like southern rock.

 
     
dennis dawe Joined Apr 17, 2010
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 08, 2018, 04:31 AM

Leave it guys

‘Try and come up with an original TITLE and a story line that has not been done to death

Try and think Cross Over Songs this bizarre fascination with Old Time Country

amazes me

Two Quotes here

“I always try to reach for a distinctive title” Leo Robin

” First there is the title (that) hits like a bullet. When a title occurs. I have begun” Johnny Mercer

IF YOU MUST WRITE COUNTRY MUSIC

Go and work on a modern farm and stop thinking Gene Autry and Roy Rogers.

Sinatra once said.” Country Music Is For People who have never grown up”

Prove him wrong . Titles like—Highways Dont Kill—By The Time I Get To Phoenix -

Line Man For The County- -  Crazy - You’ve Lost That Loving Feeling- 

Don’t It Make My Brown Eyes Blue -  I can tell if a writer is going to be any good

by his - SoundClick Song Titles ,

Remember this ; if your song pitch does arrive on the Publishers desk.

it can get rejected by a Crap over used or Dated Song Title, without even a listen

[ Edited: 08 October 2018 05:17 AM by Peter Kristian]
 
     
Avatar
Peter Kristian Joined Jan 11, 2008
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

 
Oct 08, 2018, 09:20 AM

Peter, this was just a bit of fun. You are preaching to the choir.

 
     
Avatar
Gavin Sinclair Joined Dec 02, 2014
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank
  • Rank

Send PM

1 of 3
1