don’t go away

 
       
 
Oct 16, 2018, 07:13 PM

all i can say
don’t go away
might happen one day
but not today

i wouldn’t be fine
if you went away
i’d do anything
to make you stay

don’t go away
don’t go away
might happen one day
but not today

you’re what i’ve been looking for
it’s been a revolving door

don’t go away
don’t go away
may happen one day
but not today

don’t go away
don’t go away
don’t go away

[ Edited: 18 October 2018 10:33 AM by dennis dawe]
 
     
dennis dawe Joined Apr 17, 2010
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Oct 17, 2018, 12:22 PM

Denis
a bit to much repeating in my humble opinion . think it could work just needs a little work . but you may have music that suits it down to the ground ? 
if you are trying to hold on to someone then think this is a better line

you’re what I’ve been looking for
time to shut that revolving door   > personal opinion
john

 
     
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Oct 18, 2018, 08:29 AM

I don’t think you can shut a revolving door, LOL.

Maybe “time to stop that revolving door” or “enough of the revolving door.”

 
     
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Oct 18, 2018, 10:35 AM
Gavin Sinclair - 18 October 2018 08:29 AM

I don’t think you can shut a revolving door, LOL.

Maybe “time to stop that revolving door” or “enough of the revolving door.”

I never used the word stop.

 
     
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Oct 18, 2018, 10:43 AM
dennis dawe - 18 October 2018 10:35 AM
Gavin Sinclair - 18 October 2018 08:29 AM

I don’t think you can shut a revolving door, LOL.

Maybe “time to stop that revolving door” or “enough of the revolving door.”

I never used the word stop.

I never said you did

 
     
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Oct 18, 2018, 12:01 PM

yes can see it would be hard to shut > but it was a metaphor anyway .

john

 
     
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