The Sober Truth

 
       
 
Feb 06, 2019, 07:48 PM

THE SOBER TRUTH
Jwallace 2/4/19
c1
All the beer in Texas
cant drink you off my mind
a hundred rounds of Coke and Crown
wont dry these bloodshot eyes
I just cant flee your memory
no matter how I try
so before I face the sober truth
I’ll drink this county dry
V1
you started out the letter
with it’s not you its me
the next line said you needed space
that’s all I had to read
I didn’t see it coming
hell they say love is blind
but sitting here these memories
are making my throat dry
C2
All the beer in Texas
can’t drink you off my mind
a hundred rounds of Coke and Crown
won’t dry these bloodshot eyes
I just can’t flee your memory
no matter how I try
so before I face the sober truth
I’ll drink this county dry
V2
I called up an old buddy
from my old running days
to my surprise and to his
he’d suffered the same fate
now we’re going round for round
running from the truth
tomorrow we’ll be sober
tonight it’s ninety proof
C3
All the beer in Texas
can’t drink you off my mind
a hundred rounds of Coke and Crown
won’t dry these bloodshot eyes
I just can’t flee your memory
no matter how I try
before I face the sober truth
I’m gonna drink this county dry
bridge
Yea it’s not like I like it
but it’s all I can do
not to break down and call you
so for now this’ll just have to do
repeat C3

 
     
johnny wallace Joined Oct 28, 2016
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Feb 07, 2019, 11:56 AM

The Lyric stays coherently on theme. That’s a virtue.

The ‘rounds/Crown’ internal Rhyme early in Chorus 1 succeeds nicely. It is in the Nursery Rhyme style that works well for a reason and is worthy of study. It may be used again in ‘flee/memory’. I don’t know if you intended it or it just came out that way, inspired as opposed to ‘crafted’.

The choice of title, “Sober Truth”, arrives in the next to last line of the Chorus, with “I’ll drink this county dry” in the strategic last Line, the one left ringing in listeners’ ears as the Chorus ends. It probably works, more ‘memorable’ when read or spoken than when sung, but possibly still serving the function of being the title.

You open with your Chorus. This is an unusual style, worthy of study. In some Songs it wouldn’t work. In some it works nicely. Knowing it can work might inspire Songwriters to explore it, adding a little variety to the same-old Verse/Chorus routine.

(‘you’, the Love-Interest Character. ‘my’, the Singer-Character. Introduced right in Verse I Line 1. The listener is eves-dropping on ‘his’ conversation, in absentia, with ‘her’, OR, importantly, assuming the Character of the Singer-Character, imagining himself in the story.)

THE SOBER TRUTH
Jwallace copyright 2/4/19

(Chorus 1)
All the beer in Texas
cant drink you off my mind
A hundred rounds of Coke and Crown
won’t dry these bloodshot eyes
I just can’t flee your memory
no matter how I try
so before I face the Sober Truth
I’ll drink this county dry

(Verse I)
You started out the letter (‘the’ letter; abstract. ‘your’ letter; lets her ‘own’ it.)
with, “It’s not you. It’s me.”
The next line said you needed space (Option: Your next line says you need your space)
That’s all I had to read (That’s all I have to read.)
I didn’t see it coming
Hell they say love is blind
but sitting here these memories (Do you need ‘but’)
are making my throat dry (Interestling ‘throat dry’ Lyrical lead-back to Chorus. With Melody/pitch it could supply the Pre-Chorus ‘lift’ that serves that function too.)

(Chorus 2)
All the beer in Texas
can’t drink you off my mind
A hundred rounds of Coke and Crown
won’t dry these bloodshot eyes (Irrational to think it would, which fits the theme.)
I just can’t flee your memory
no matter how I try
so before I face the Sober Truth (Do you need ‘so’?)
I’ll drink this county dry

(Verse II)
I called up an old buddy
from my old running days
To my surprise and to his
he’d suffered the same fate
Now we’re going round for round
running from the truth
Tomorrow we’ll be sober
Tonight it’s ninety proof (Again, on theme, leading Lyrically back to the Chorus)

(Chorus 3)
All the beer in Texas
can’t drink you off my mind
A hundred rounds of Coke and Crown
won’t dry these bloodshot eyes
I just can’t flee your memory
no matter how I try
Before I face the Sober Truth
I’m gonna drink this county dry

(Bridge)
Yeah, it’s not like I like it
but it’s all I can do
not to break down and call you
so for now this’ll just have to do (Do you need ‘just’?)

(Repeat Chorus 3)
(Coda)
Before I face the Sober Truth
I’m gonna drink this county dry

(It’s not an uplifting story, but it might still be entertaining. We get to experience his despair, and then the Song ends and we’re freed of it, back to our own life without those woes.)

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Feb 07, 2019, 10:20 PM

Thank you for your study on the song. I always enjoy the way you break down a song. The explanation really helps a rookie like me pick up on parts of a song. I admit. I usually read your post several times throughout the next few days. It doesn’t always sink right in. I do appreciate you

 
     
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Feb 08, 2019, 10:54 PM

You’re welcome johnny! The Lyric has balance, structure. That Pre-Chorus sense in that last line of the Verse has merit. Some folks write a Pre-Chorus as long as the Chorus, when in reality it need only be a one Line Melodic variation.

I’m glad you feel you’re benefiting from my analysis. How to say all these things and get the point across is a challenge sometimes. I guess it’s a challenge to read them too!

I’m always looking for the positive outcome in a Lyric too. I’m afraid these boys are just gonna drink themselves to death. But how to get the Singer-Character out of his slide and give him some strength and hope, maybe even get the girl back, is a huge challenge. Sometimes they do it with a video. The Lyric doesn’t end well but the video does.

Keep writin’! Keep exploring. There’s more where you found this one!

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Feb 09, 2019, 07:53 PM

Thank you very much Gary. And I will.

 
     
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