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“Pour Yourself Out”

 
       
 
Oct 07, 2005, 01:31 PM

What do you think about this one?

He was walking down the backroad
Thumb out in the air
Old man pulls up says “where you headin Bud”
He says man “anywhere but here”
So he climbed onto the front seat
Said thanks, and told the man his name
He had the smell on his cloths that every drunk knows
The old man said “son you oughta be ashamed”

You got to pour yourself out of the bottle
Dust yourself off everyday
It’s time to figure out what life’s all about
You just can’t go on livin this way

And the old man told him his story
How been down that same road before
How he’d lost everything because of that drink
And just didn’t wanna live anymore
But then a miracle happened
God sent an angel to stand by his side
He put the bottle down and turned his life around
And that angel soon became his bride

You got to pour yourself out of the bottle
Dust yourself off everyday
It’s time to figure out what life’s all about
You just can’t go on livin this way

They pulled up at the truck stop
The old man gave his hand a good shake
Said you would be wise to take my advice
There’s consequences to the choices we make
As he watched the old man drive away
Somehow he knew what had to be done
He picked up the phone and called back home
His new life had just begun

Cause he poured himself out of the bottle
Dusted himself off everyday
He finally figured out what life’s all about
And didn’t want to go on livin that way

Yeah he poured himself out of the bottle
Dusted himself off everyday
He figured out what life and love are about
And everyday is a beautiful day
And he wants to keep livin it that way

 
     
eric stewart Joined Sep 30, 2005
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Oct 07, 2005, 05:45 PM

Good job.

 
     
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Charles Kirkland Joined Feb 15, 2005
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Oct 07, 2005, 06:07 PM

ditto Charles could do a good on this.if he could find time.bjh

 
     
eric stewart Joined Sep 30, 2005
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Oct 08, 2005, 01:51 AM

Eric, I’ve read several of your lyrics and they are very good. If I may make a suggestion, try rewriting this verse

And the old man told him his story
How been down that same road before
How he’d lost everything because of that drink
And just didn’t wanna live anymore
But then a miracle happened
God sent an angel to stand by his side
He put the bottle down and turned his life around
And that angel soon became his bride

It doesn’t flow as natural to my ear as the rest of it does. Just a suggestion.
I hope to hear from you soon man!

 
     
Tim Ogle Joined Dec 27, 2004
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Oct 08, 2005, 02:42 AM

Thanks Tim, 

I agree didn’t feel right when I wrote it on the way to work this morning.  I’ll work on it an let you know.

Eric

 
     
eric stewart Joined Sep 30, 2005
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Oct 09, 2005, 10:13 PM

Really like the story behind this one.  Simple but effective imagery.  Keep ‘em coming…

 
     
Rory Gaddin Joined Aug 26, 2004
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Oct 10, 2005, 07:31 AM

eric,
I think Tim is right about the second verse. I don’t know how much you are planning to change it, but this works for the melody I am singing to it. Very little change really. Just a suggestion. Use it if it works for you, chunk the idea if it doesn’t work with your melody.


And the old man told him his story
How been down that same road before
How he’d lost everything because of that drink
And just didn’t wanna live anymore
But then a miracle happened
God sent an angel to his side
He put the bottle down and turned his life around
The day that angel became his bride

 
     
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