Strawberry :...Letter:..23:..:....:......[male vocals]

Mar 09, 2010, 04:25 AM

Chorus :
Baby Please Don’t pull
covers off of me
I’m tired of tossing turning
in my sleep
These memories of us
are so deep
This is my last letter
it’s strawberry letter 23

Baby I’m driving through snowy icy
‘streets Is there another lover trying
to take my place baby
I want you to feel rainbow color
skies in a tropical breeze
I need to be free to be me
This is my last letter baby

 

Chorus :
Baby Please Don’t pull
covers off of me
I’m tired of tossing turning
in my sleep
These memories of us
are so deep
This is my last letter
it’s strawberry letter 23

 

lift:
This letter
is my poetry in motion
I’m walking in this maze
of emotion

I’m tired of these guessing games
People say the sun always shine
after the rain I can’t stop emotions
from tearing at my brain

I see visions of your loveliness
here with me I need to be free to be me

Chorus :
Baby Please Don’t pull
covers off of me
I’m tired of tossing turning
in my sleep
These memories of us
are so deep
This is my last letter
it’s strawberry letter 23

 

 

All Rights Reserved (c) 2010
Shirley Elane Matthews
:....Strawberrry Letter 23::..

Mar 09, 2010, 03:34 PM

so much emotion, love it

Mar 09, 2010, 09:18 PM

‘’....Whoa,,Omg..it;s Nikitta..:)...Whoa,,lol.lol.
.girl give me some that’’ Caribbean,,imagery
...The midwest had an awful winter!!..
it was snowing with icy conditions’‘every two weeks
Since Last Christmas..extreme cold temps..We finally are coming out of all
those storms..It;s really good to hear from ya..Nikitta..
And thank you soooooooo=====  :)
much for stopping by to check out my Piece..
‘‘Strawberry Letter 23,,lol.lol..I really enjoyed writing this Piece..
‘I was thinking for Contemporary purposes..’‘That I should..
maybe tweaked the title to another title ‘’....hmmmmmmm… What do you think ??
..I kinda like the image ‘‘of a man lovin his lady``````````
so much that he writes 23 letters w/a strawberry scent,,,hmmmmm
....Thanx,, nikkita..I’m glad youre feelin this Piece..

See you in a few;o
Shirl;o

Mar 10, 2010, 10:39 AM

Hi Shirl, I actually like the title it’s one of the reason why i check out the song. “Strawberry letter 23”  its intriguing to the eyes. With that said, when i first read the title I thought the song would have been a country song, so i guess you may be on to something

Mar 10, 2010, 10:44 AM

“snowing with icy conditions” wow. we are actually experiencing drought like condition down here.

I love the new look of songwriter 101, it has a modern feel to it. I will definitely be in here more often.

Mar 10, 2010, 11:35 AM

You know what shirl,any where i see your name i like to check what you’ve come up with.hmmmm!this is another piece you have here.
do check my new write.
cheers.
faustina

Mar 10, 2010, 09:15 PM

Helllo Faustina,,

Thanx,,,Those are some very positive thoughts,,:)..thanx,,for Checking out THis Piece..
Check out MY version Two ‘‘of Letter 23..:)

See you in a few;o
Shirl;o

Mar 10, 2010, 09:24 PM

‘’ RE write :
Changed Title to:
Letter 23:.....(c) 2010
Spinning A Version [2]
All Rights REserved
Shirley Elane Matthews

Hey lover my heart
is pumping out
bullets of misery
How much suffering
must I pay for baby
even waterfalls can’t cure
my mentality

I’m in New York the
City that never sleeps
I wanna feel your
loveliness here
with me
Come take
me out of this
bondage baby

Nothin is constant
nothin stays the same

I’m cruising in this Ferrari
changing lanes
People say after
the rain there’s
sunshine baby
Don’t you remember
Those kind times

Right now I;m gonna
blow out this radio
frequency
I can’t believe how
many love letters
you keep sending me

 

Is there another lover trying
to take my place baby
Is this your last letter baby
Did you really need time
to breathe
Did you text
me another letter 23

 

What I Did for you
You did for me
baby youre coming
hard at me with this
grief I’m tired of tossing
turning in my sleep
spooked by memories
that are real but deep

 

lift:
Baby I;m your
poetry in motion
I’m walking in this maze
of emotion

 
Shadows of past lovin
runs through my mind
as tension divide us
I lose track of time
The loneliness won’t
let me be did you
text me another
letter 23

 

 

All Rights Reserved (c) 2010
Shirley Elane Matthews
:...Letter 23 :..
Revison:..(2)

Mar 10, 2010, 09:56 PM

i only read the first one im sort of short on time nd i havnt been on here a while but i like the first one on what ive read so far…but the only lines i had a problem with were “after the rain i cant stop the emotions from tearing at my brain” instead of brain i think you should use mind :) but i like the first one…ill read your re write later ;)

Mar 10, 2010, 10:22 PM

Hell;o. Kaitlyn..:).. Thanx for stopping by..hmmmmmm,,I ;m hoping..that the Rewrite version
will give you more of An understanding..of Where I;m going with my thoughts…
But’’ The Tearing of Emotions at the brain…hmmmmm is basically when you have
such intense thoughts..When you love someone and youre afraid of losing them
to someone else…and it don;t necessary means that person is insecure,,,,
it means that’‘'person would like to believe that love they share is
strong and’‘untouchable..’‘..I;m lookin forward to your opinion
on, the Rewrite..

SEe you in a few;o
Shirl;o

Mar 10, 2010, 11:47 PM

I like both versions, but prefer the first. Maybe you should leave the blender on till it mixes some specific reasons why the 23rd is the last letter? You touch on a question of fidelity, but then you hurry away from that topic. Flesh it out more…go into the basis for your song; the song(s) need a beginning, a middle and an ending. Why strawberries? Connect the dots for me, Shirl.

Love
JD

Mar 11, 2010, 02:20 AM

Hell;o James..it;s good to see ya..:)...I knew it was something
;;that needed to be strengthen,,hmmmmmm.
Whoa James..’‘Hmmmmm. Okay I feel what cha,,saying
‘‘you need more depth..I think you made a valid point
James..’’ I gotta stop thinking that the Audience will know
‘‘certain references like’‘Why The letter is a
Strawberry letter 23..
‘’‘flesh things out more’‘..I like that term,,..
.This is a challenge I have only so many
verses I can play with,,’
‘I shall remember to connect the dots…

*****Thank you soooo much James for stopping by to check out
This’‘Piece,,:).Whoa This has been an interesting Critq. I have
learned many things from you James..thanx for the input…;o

See you in a few;o
LOve~~
Shirl;o

Mar 11, 2010, 10:28 PM

lol i know what it means hun…idk…i was just goin by what i thought would sound good :) nd i agree with jd i like the first version better

Mar 12, 2010, 02:00 AM

The Brothers Johnson have a song called strawberry letter 23

Mar 12, 2010, 03:31 AM

lol.lol..:)... it;s all good Thanx for stopping By..Kaitlyn…I will def, ‘‘take into consideration
What you said…’‘The first version..is showing more potential…’‘.....

See you ina a few;o
Shirl;o

Mar 12, 2010, 03:40 AM

Yes I;m aware of that’‘..:)...I waS in high school when that song ‘‘hit the waves..’‘’...
We talkin over 30 years ago,,,so The Brothers got their version and I got mine
I would spin this as a diferent mix…with a different production….etc,,,

And There are thousands of Remixes’‘Of Strawberry letter# 23 ...
so.. That;s the way the ball bounces ,,,straight up….

Shirl;o