paranoia (with Tony Curatolo) new re write

Mar 12, 2010, 06:22 PM

Paranoia
Looking into the mirror
My thoughts cant get any clearer
It reflects all those memories i think im getting paranoia

Its shadow follows me in the dark
LIke an eagles claws it tears me apart
It sneaks up behind and taps me on the shoulder
Nobodys there but my own paranoia

Fear gripping at me
Tearing into my soul so deep
Night times shadows follow me
Im not insane no im not crazy

Its shaddow follows me in the dark
like an eagles claws it tears me apart
It sneaks up behind and taps me on the shoulder
Nobodys there but my own paranoia

Its the voice inside my head
Its another side of me that i dread
I hear its laughter every time i fall
Its my shaddow on the wall

Its shadow follows me in the dark
Like an eagles claws it tears me appart
It sneaks up behind and taps me on the shoulder
Nobodys there but my own paranoia

I try to run i try to hide
It keeps appearing at my side
It bites my mind, keeps its eye on me
Paranoia’s fangs ready to devour me.

©Written by Tony Curatolo and Kaitlyn O’Connell 3/12/10

Mar 12, 2010, 11:40 PM

out of curiosity, how exactly did you come up with this lyric, what kind of mind set were you in.

Mar 13, 2010, 11:19 AM

I can’t speak for Katie but I did some research on the issue of paranoia and then wrote a lyric based upon my conceptions of what paranoia was all about. Katie did a fine job making my original lyric into something excellent. I wasn’t in any special state of mind. I used my imagination combined with what I learned from researched.

Mar 13, 2010, 11:09 PM

uhm…i wasnt really in any type of mind set i saw his work and asked myself what do and dont i like about this lyric, and i went along with that :p but i liked the spookey type of inner mind set i had so i kept that :D i liked it ...but…yeah :p idk to be honest

Mar 13, 2010, 11:57 PM

i like

Mar 14, 2010, 11:14 PM

thanx steven

Mar 15, 2010, 12:27 AM

Kaitlyn and Tony
Good write; I’m hearing a darkish Audioslave groove as I read. Nice!

JD

Mar 15, 2010, 01:55 PM

ty jd

Mar 15, 2010, 03:19 PM

Nice write from a nice girl - are you irish? Your name sounds irish :)

I think - in my opinion, it will be a bit hard to produce because the verses itself are a bit short. Maybe you should have 2 verses and then one chorus, again two verses and a final chorus… :)

is there any place where I can listen to your voice?

Mar 15, 2010, 06:32 PM

Paranoina sucks~~~ but this song doesn’t

Mar 15, 2010, 08:55 PM

lol to Shari comment

Mar 15, 2010, 08:59 PM

Tony and Kaitlyn, you guys did a great job lyric wise, I would like to write something like this one day hence the above questions.

Mar 15, 2010, 09:10 PM

why yes i am :D thts where i get my annie curls from

thanks for the critique :D ill talk to tony and take it into consideration

i dont have my voice on recording yet…to be honest i dont think i will until maybe after june…but im working my hardest on it….i might have it on recording before that…but im not sure… me nd the guy im suppost to be doin it with are having problems right now :p but i really am trying….

Mar 15, 2010, 09:50 PM

Lol Nikkita

Mar 16, 2010, 08:51 AM

Hi all.

Thanks for your comments. I appreciate your input and I’m happy to see most of you liked the lyric.

Tony

Mar 16, 2010, 11:50 AM

There’s always someone who has to nag, this time I’m the one. First: I like it! Good imagery (the eagle’s claws, the taps on the shoulder, the eye on me ..)!

The only thing that annoyed me is the use of the term “paranoia” within the lyrics, I have no problem with the title. It’s not a term that comes from the inside but rather an outside diagnosis. See these lines:

Im not insane no im not crazy
...
Nobodys there but my own paranoia

There’s a switch from suffering paranoia to self-reflection that ruins the dark and threatening atmosphere of the song.

There are people who believe that the title of the song MUST appear in the lyrics, preferably in the chorus. Here, I think, it should definitely be left out of the lyrics altogether, so they can create their own consistent atmosphere.

Bernd