;;;. TaKE ME With You:::

Mar 16, 2010, 07:27 AM

Baby here comes the sun don’t act surprise
We can live in mansions heart shape skies
If This is my heaven let’s keep love alive
When I look towards heaven I can see
God creations above the clouds
I hope you can feel my heart beating
out loud

I’m blowin purple crystals
up against
the silvery moon
Through my window pane
Daffodils will blossom soon
Baby help me cope these
feelings are new

Chorus:
Sometimes I admit I don’t
know what to do
All I know is that
I want you to take
me with you

Baby we can ride until
the break of dawn
feel late night
kisses of laying
in your arms
When the morning
comes tell me
what you wanna
do
Baby just tell me you
wanna take me
with you

There’s a rumor going
around town saying
you don’t want me
around
Baby tell me these
rumors aren’t true

 

Chorus:
Sometimes I admit I don’t
know what to do
All I know is that
I want you to take
me with you

 

Baby I’m rockin
from the cradel to
the grave
Tell me if this
love can be save
I’m feelin blue

 

 

 

Chorus:
Sometimes I admit I don’t
know what to do
All I know is that
I want you to take
me with you

 

 

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ShirlEy Elane Matthews
;;;. TaKE ME With You

Mar 18, 2010, 02:49 PM

Shirl….I Really Love this….Especially the chorus. Great hook for sure.
God Bless you and your lyrics,
Shari

Mar 18, 2010, 02:51 PM

Although…I do think the 1st verse is too much.But hey…thats just me !!!
Take care,
Shari

Mar 18, 2010, 02:56 PM

Hi Shirl,

yeah, I think this is a real good write! The Chorus is pretty good, yeah, this has a lot of potenzial, so I believe :)

Mar 18, 2010, 07:38 PM

Reading it again…I really love this write hey…You rock girl.
Gods Blessing for you,
Shari

Mar 18, 2010, 10:56 PM

It sounds a bit bipolar, sorta kinda. It begins with (you) telling (him) “dont act surprised,” but (you) go on to say there are the rumors, etcetera about how (he’s) having second thoughts, yet you say “take me with you.” Very confusing. The rest is cool imagery, and interesting, but adds nothing in the way of details pertaining to the confusion, or what caused the confusion. MEAT AND POTATOS. We’ve talked about details before; develop this into a storyline and take the story through these motions, THEN you’ll have a killer good lyric.

Smilin’ Upon Ya
JD

Mar 19, 2010, 01:51 PM

‘’‘Hey Shari!!..:)Thanx..for coming back to comment,,hmmmmm.:)
You know what time it is..lol….And I;m glad you enjoyed This
Piece,,thanx for stopping by,,God Bless you too..

Shirl;o

Mar 19, 2010, 02:03 PM

Hell;o Martin:.. Whoa..:). I;m glad you stopped by to Check out This Piece’‘..
Thanx,,’‘Yes I luv the sound of Those words..’‘Potential,,, I Can dig it..:)
and i;m glad youre feelin the chorus..

:)
See you in a few;o
Shirl;o

Mar 19, 2010, 02:10 PM

ol.lol.lol..:).... Yes Love Can be bi-polar..’‘Affairs Of the Heart usually are..:)..
lol…James I’m always open to..any imput you can give,,:)..That;s understood
between,,us..And yes it does appear that I need a lil tighten up,,in certain
areas,,;o…hmmmm.’‘i;m glad ,, that you have that ;;insight to ,, to point
me in the right direction..:)...Thanx,,,,;o

:)
See you in a few;o
love~~
Shirl;o

Mar 19, 2010, 06:33 PM

Hey Shirl..Really like the write ,,,keep or sweep

Baby here comes the sun don’t act surprised
We can live in mansions heart shape skies
If This is my heaven let’s keep love alive
When I look towards heaven I can see your eyes

God creations above the clouds
I hope you can feel my heart beating
out loud

I’m blowin purple crystals
against the silvery moon
Through my window pane
Daffodils will blossom soon

Baby help me cope these
feelings are new

Darlene

Mar 19, 2010, 07:27 PM

‘’..... Hey’’ Dar..  it’s good to see ya..:)..Hmmmmmmm.. That’s A beautiful layout
I think I’m gonna keep it..:)..I luv to have different takes’‘With Songs of this
nature..because ‘‘As you know it;s all in the delivery’‘of the artist/singer..
This Piece is prob, gonna be spinning;;with some male vocals….
Thanx for stoppng by,, and Thanx for the props…

:)

SEE you in a few;o
Shirl;o