“We Leave The Lights On” demo: seeking input/instruction

Mar 16, 2010, 07:45 PM

Dan Ornduff wrote the music to these lyrics.
Finally got the demo done.
I thought I would post it here for comments and input.
So, naturally, all thoughts very welcome.

Thanks
SB

WE LEAVE THE LIGHTS ON
Lyrics by Steven Bines
Music by Dan Ornduff

Steven Bines/SAKER5 copyright© 2010 all rights reserved.

http://www.my space.com/saker5bines

Verse 1)
Some couples like the lights off, keep it dark as can be
But lovin in the dark makes no sense to me
Don’t need imagination to tantalize my mind
When I’m lookin for a face, it’s yours I want to find

Chorus)
We leave the lights on, we leave the lights on
Got no use for the dark, what can I say
We leave the lights on when we start to play

Verse 2)
Makin love in the dark can set the devil free
For things to be real, I think you got to see
My baby likes the lights on and that’s alright with me
Cuz I like lookin up seeing her look back at me

Repeat Chorus)

Solo)

Verse 3)
Don’t act out of place; we’re never in your face
We use the tools the lord gave us; don’t think it’s a disgrace
And though we try… to keep it down
Its thunder and lightening when we fool around

Repeat Chorus)
(Last line x2)

Mar 16, 2010, 10:21 PM

Oh heck:
I will respond to my own post and say this, to try to get some input/ suggestions:
THIS HERE SONG IS ABOUT SEX!!!
So..?
Any good?
Thanks
SB

Mar 18, 2010, 03:47 PM

Just my input…I like the idea…got me to thinking…how about just “Lights On” for the title

Maybe this is just where my mind is right now and the type of things I’ve been writing about lately, so I’m just gonna offer my changes:

Maybe change “Cuz I like lookin up seeing her look back at me” to “Cuz I like lookin’ up seeing her looking DOWN at me” (gives a more visual effect to the position of lovemaking - she’s on top)

Don’t act out of place; we’re never in your face
We use the tools the lord gave us; don’t think it’s a disgrace
And though we try… to keep it down
Its thunder and lightening when we fool around

How about…

There’s nothing wrong
with getting it on (or making love strong)
while the lights are still on…

I’ll have to come back to you later with more kinda in the middle of something else…but I love the idea of the song!  Seriously can visualize it…I like it!

Mar 19, 2010, 08:28 PM

cool.I like the feeling.
God bless,
Shari