Wargasm

Mar 17, 2010, 03:02 PM

I remember recently posting to someone that I think the Title should always be in the song>>>So I was looking through some of my old songs and found one where the title is not in it….To prove (mostly to myself)Rules are meant to be broken.There really should be no rules in songwriting.And I take back what I said about the Title being in the song…
There are always exceptions…I wrote this on the Bass when I was in a heavy metal band…Definatley heavy beware lol
God Bless us all,
Shari

“Wargasm”

On to battle,A war breaks out
To change this world with your defences
Tear down the fences that started this hate
Evil powers that kill our sons and rape our daughters
Onward slaughter
Government hatered ruling this game

Ancient anger hear our screams
You kill for love,you kill for peace?
Time to stop you in your tracks
Before you waiste the human race

Broken peices the walls fall down
Life expired on the ground
Nothing to gain here
But population decrease
Flaming towers of broken promice
Empty gardens,shattered hearts
Are you happy ? What have you gained?

Ancient anger hear our screams
You hate so much
We feel the pain
Empty heads that rule the ranks
Of all the Evil in this place

Sacrifice yourself for your country
But for you,would it do the same?
Crucifying your own brothers
Why even bother?
Your heart blackened
You feel no shame

Ancient anger hear our screams
You kill for love,you kill for peace?
Time to stop you in your tracks
Before you waste the human race

Copyright 2001 Shari Windsor All rights reserved

Mar 17, 2010, 03:11 PM

We will never have Peace~~ unless~~ there is no war !!!
God Loves Us,
Shari

Mar 18, 2010, 12:34 AM

Shari, I was perpared, for heavy, Wow !!! That was heavy I’m not sure what I think, this is where my age come in. lol For heavy metal its pretty over powering, I must say Good job, if your in to that.
God Bless,
Elaine

Mar 18, 2010, 06:35 AM

Shari, this is a good write but the only problem is you don’t walk away singing anything. I think you need a hook and need to drive it home to make it memorable. The hook does not have to be wargasm but it would be nice.. It is a cool weird word. JMOHO

Mar 18, 2010, 09:22 AM

interesting write i can hear the deep voice of metal singing this, and the drop c tuning that goes along with it, i am not a very big fan of metal, i got my bands though.  if you like rock check out my band at http://www.bradleyjacks.com and let me know what you think.

Mar 18, 2010, 01:41 PM

Wow Shari-powerful images here!
Cindy

Mar 18, 2010, 01:42 PM

I dig your band Joe.Your website is cool too.

Mar 18, 2010, 01:44 PM

Thank you Elaine,Tom,Joe and Cindy for all your comments.And Tom I quite agree with you.
God Bless you all,
Shari

Mar 18, 2010, 11:06 PM

Interesting, cryptic and bold…but I’d like to see you better exploit your hook/title. Very cool.

Hugs
JD

Mar 19, 2010, 12:34 AM

Shari,

Being a soldier I can appreciate what your message is…although I want to disagree with this line…every part of me wants to disagree with this even though I know that it’s the truth…

Sacrifice yourself for your country
But for you,would it do the same? - Nope…can’t even get decent healthcare after the fact…
Crucifying your own brothers…the country tries to do that too…
Why even bother?...war is a byproduct and money is its name…wait until you see what is to come…shhh
Your heart blackened…just like the Catholic Church…shh…II Corinthians 11:14/I John 2:18/Matt. 23:14
You feel no shame…they who sign paperwork do not feel the pain that we do…

Not preaching, just trying to convey the truth the way you did…

Here’s another secret…this one’s for you JD…
Annuit Coeptis Novus Ordo Seclorum…

-LeeAndrew

Mar 19, 2010, 01:53 AM

Thank you J.D. for your most appreciated advise.Maybe you could help me with it !!!? Hugs to you too.

LeeAndrew,
Thank you so much for stopping by~~ I almost removed this post because I thought oh no~~What would Lee think?
I thank you for your input.It makes it all soo much clearer.
I woke up at 3 am with these words coming out of my mouth, it was just after 9/11.
So I wrote it down and got out my bass and put the melody to it without even thinking about it.
It was finished in less than 10 minutes. No rewrites ~~yet.
I was worried you might be offended and Im happy to hear that your ok with it.
God loves you,
Shari

Mar 19, 2010, 02:06 AM

Awww~~ I also hear now~ what your saying to J.D Lee.
So So true unfortunately,
God Bless US All,
Shari

Mar 19, 2010, 02:51 AM

Hey J.D~~~ Roger said to tell you hello for him !!
God Loves us,
Shari

Mar 19, 2010, 04:21 AM

“Wagasm” - a hell of a title! Violence and sex are indeed closely related, a relation that has caused much suffering. It’s the testosterone, you see. War is a typical male pastime. Any excuse will do to start a blood frency, the killing, and raping.

“Ancient anger” - strong words, and well fitted.

“Time to stop you in your tracks
Before you waste the human race”

An appeal, that needs to be repeated until we’ve learned. Which might be never.

Truly great and necessary lyrics.

Mar 19, 2010, 12:52 PM

Nos intereo per slowness vero nos es non unus. Celestial vigilo es inter nos , quod totus est puteus. The New World Order is coming—is here, but will not prevail my friend.

JD

Mar 19, 2010, 02:55 PM

Ye s.. The New World Order is coming..’‘Revolutionized’‘..and ready to jump off can
you dig it…I have written a Piece called’‘’‘Revolutionized’‘..James Have Read it…
and Lee..’‘Shari i;m not sure if you have read it..’‘

@ Shari’‘This is a deep Piece’‘..The title in itself is a powerful entity….
It will challenge you to think..I luv how you played with the words
very effective,,,,....

:)

See you in a few;o
Shirl;o