the cowboy way please hear my song

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Kr6ZPXl4TYM

Dave you just keep getting better and better, what more can I say
God Bless,
Elaine

thanks Elaine for checking it out if anyone else could give me opinions i would appreciate it

Dave,

I think you’ve got a good one here. Lyrics, vocal and guitar. Maybe need to bump up your vocals on the recording sounds like you can sing pretty well.

Kevin

yea your right the video was done with a digital camera i would like to do a real recording with it thanks for the compliment i needed that still not real sure of myself trying to get better and curious to what folks think thanks again

The intro struck me as long by about—8 seconds (coincidence?), and I wanted the strumming broken up a bit more with picking, especially in the bridge, not just softened strums. I like the song overall, and I’m sure it’ll make a great demo when you can get to a proper studio.

JD

actually the 8 second intro i didnt notice that is cool for you to catch that JD and as far as the strumming i aggree it needs to be mixed up more i appreciate you stopping in on this everyones input has helped me tremendously I am always happy to get point of views from others i know my friends will tell me it sounds good even when it doesnt that is why i am so happy to be here on songwriter101 straight up opinions is the only way to improve

Hi Dave, I think the melody is real nice.. I had a hard time understanding the words. can you post the lyric. I was listening on a laptop, probably the reason.

Good stuff

thanks for viewing my song the responses have been great