LeeAndrew Bray - “Country Song” - Rough Demo Worktape

 
       
 
Dec 09, 2011, 12:25 AM

Friends,

Here’s a song that I wrote called “Country Song”. I would greatly appreciate some feedback whether positive or negative!!!
Thanks a million and God bless!!!

-LeeAndrew

Lyrics:

“Country Song”
Written by S. LeeAndrew Bray

Verse One
She said I like things that I can feel, from the heart, deep and real
Can you dig that? I sure hope so
I like the stories that make me cry, a love song brings tears to my eyes
Do you feel me? Boy I like it slow

Pre-Chorus
So I played her a song on my guitar
It went slow and smooth and man I sure got far

Chorus
A tune about life and love and the lack there of
A tear in my beer my baby disappeared, long gone
I got fired, yeah, I lost my job, the unemployment line is so dang long
I sang from my soul as I sang along oh, I sang her a sad slow country song

Verse Two
People say play something happy, something peppy upbeat not sappy
But that wouldn’t be country enough for her speed
She likes the way it feels inside, her heart beats fast on a slow ride
You can ask her and she will agree

Pre-Chorus
So I played her a song on my guitar
It went slow and smooth and man I sure got far

Chorus
A tune about life and love and the lack there of
A tear in my beer my baby disappeared, long gone
I got fired, yeah, I lost my job, the unemployment line is so dang long
I sang from my soul as I sang along oh, I sang her a sad slow country song

“Country Song” Written by S. LeeAndrew Bray ©2011 No Middle Ground Publishing Co. All rights reserved.

 

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LeeAndrew Bray Joined May 23, 2007
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Dec 10, 2011, 12:52 AM

I like the sound, the feel, the guitar. I like what feels like a natural flow of words. I don’t much like the “Man I sure got far” sentiment - you might regret having to sing that in 10 years or so, but its probably pretty commercial LOL. You’re talking to a guy with 4 daughters and a different perspective.

 
     
Greg Ball Joined Dec 08, 2011
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Dec 11, 2011, 09:00 PM

I though you did really good I think it is very commercial like the the guitar, keep up the good work.
God Bless
Elaine

 
     
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Elaine Brewer Joined Jun 06, 2009
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Jan 13, 2012, 02:19 AM

Thanks for your positive feedback…I’ve submitted this demo to some folks who may be interested in cutting it…who knows, maybe I’ll get lucky…lol…

 
     
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LeeAndrew Bray Joined May 23, 2007
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Jan 13, 2012, 05:24 AM

I’ll keep my fingers crossed and say a prayer, good luck, I have a feeling you will do well.
God Bless
Elaine

 
     
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Elaine Brewer Joined Jun 06, 2009
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Jan 17, 2012, 05:32 AM

-Hey man - Nice job - I could see Jason Aldean singing this one…

about the “man I sure got far” - I know what you mean, but seems a little quirky..

Maybe “straight into her arms”, or “into her heart” or something like that may work better.

Just and Idea.

-Freddy

 
     
Fred DiBlasio Jr Joined Sep 02, 2007
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Feb 01, 2012, 06:32 AM

Freddy,

Thanks for the advice!!! I’ll keep that in mind.

 
     
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LeeAndrew Bray Joined May 23, 2007
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Mar 16, 2012, 06:25 PM

Hey LeeAndrew, Perhaps the title should be changed to something like, She likes a country song? Seems lyrically like you’re trying to describe too much about what makes a “country” song in the chorus and body to me for ex. using too many words?
The prechorus dose’nt “lift” enough for me.
Your melody and arrangement don’t say, Sad country song, to my ears. It’s too, driving, if you will. I would expect to hear a slower more emotional arrangement.
Your vocal could be more out front in this take. I understand it’s a rough draft.
I’d give it 2 of 5 stars…......a good idea,not very diff. perhaps some re-writing at this point? Generally nice work….....Wally

 
     
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