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Dec 13, 2016, 10:38 PM

It always ends with one magic moment
When it all comes together,
In space and time
When that one special person steps up on the stage and
puts it all out there, for us all to love.


It all starts the same way, no one can deny this
It always comes to us from that one special place
A person,a memory,nothing is sacred
It always starts out with paper and pen


Talk to me,give me, some inspiration
Give me some reason
To write it all down
Make me feel happy,
Inspire some madness
I’ll write it all down with paper and pen


If you can’t fly
I will give you the wings
If you cant cry
I will give you the pains
I’ll make you smile,
I’ll make you dance
I’ll give you the world
If you give me a chance.


Talk to me, give me,some inspiration
Give me some reason
To write it all down
Make me feel happy,
Inspire some madness
I’ll write it all down with paper and pen


C: J Carl Morris

[ Edited: 14 December 2016 09:02 AM by Vet393]
 
     
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Dec 14, 2016, 03:26 AM

thoughts seem a little scattered here but i still like the “paper n pen” concept. kinda’ like John
Denvers’ “This old guitar” :)

 
     
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Dec 14, 2016, 08:59 AM

I am a songwriter,
I’ll sing you a story.
If you have time,
To listen to me.
It takes a few minute’s
Your time wont be wasted
And if you could,
Would you lend it to me?


It all starts the same way,
no one can deny this
It always comes to us,
from a place from within.
A person,a memory,
the love of a lifetime
It always starts out with paper and pen


Talk to me, give me,
some inspiration
Give me some reason
To take it all in
Make me feel happy,
Inspire some magic
I’ll write it all down with paper and pen


I’ll give you wings
If you cant fly
I’ll ease your pains,
If you should cry.
I’ll make you smile,
I’ll make you dance
I’ll give you the world
If you give me a chance.


Sometimes its a lifetime
Of shear desperation
Sometimes its love that
Brings peace to your heart
Listen to small things
They speak in a big way
I’ll Write it all down with
Paper and pen

C: J Carl Morris 2016

[ Edited: 17 December 2016 01:56 PM by Vet393]
 
     
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Dec 16, 2016, 11:26 PM

Again….

 
     
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Dec 17, 2016, 12:47 AM

oh WOW! Very nice, that came together well! You got a melody ? :)

 
     
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Dec 17, 2016, 01:29 AM

I will do basic guitar/ vox post on my soundcloud

 
     
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Dec 17, 2016, 03:39 AM

Great job Vet.

 
     
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Dec 17, 2016, 09:45 AM

Changed 1st verse and bridge a little…....

[ Edited: 17 December 2016 10:30 AM by Vet393]
 
     
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Dec 17, 2016, 11:46 AM

I wasn’t too Hooked until I got to the end of the stanza with the ‘...give you the world, if you give me a chance’ segment. I found that really appealing. I was rearranging stanzas on that first post but I see you’ve done a substantial rewrite. Here’s that anyway.

Dec 13, 2016, 10:38 PM

It all starts the same way. (I thought you should start with the ‘starts’ and end with the ‘ends’ Verse.)
No one can deny this.
It always comes to us from that one special place, (It always comes from that special place within…Rhyme for Pen.)
a person, a memory, nothing is sacred.
It always starts out with Paper and Pen.

(Verse 1 is abstract, ‘it’, generic ‘us’, but quickly gets to the Chorus where the Songwriter identifies himself and gets in the Song.)
(Chorus)
Talk to me! Give me, some inspiration!
Give me some reason
To write it all down!
Make me feel happy!
Inspire some madness!
I’ll write it all down with Paper and Pen.

It always ends with one magic moment
When it all comes together,
In space and time,
When that special person steps on the stage and
puts it all out there, for us all to love. (...for us all to find - Rhyme for time.)

Talk to me! Give me, some inspiration!
Give me some reason
To write it all down!
Make me feel happy!
Inspire some madness!
I’ll write it all down with Paper and Pen.

(Bridge)
If you can’t fly
I will give you the wings!
If you cant cry
I will give you the pain!
I’ll make you smile!
I’ll make you dance!
I’ll give you the world
If you give me a chance!

Talk to me! Give me, some inspiration!
Give me some reason
To write it all down!
Make me feel happy!
Inspire some madness!
I’ll write it all down with Paper and Pen.

C: J Carl Morris

There will always be another song to be written. Someone will write it. Why not you? http://www.garyeandrews.com

 
     
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Dec 17, 2016, 01:33 PM

I do no justice to songs when I sing them. Please sing it if you want.

 
     
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Dec 17, 2016, 01:58 PM

Thanks for the grest advice.

 
     
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Dec 17, 2016, 02:15 PM

just some thoughts….... :)

 
I am a songwriter,——————I’ll write you a song
I’ll sing you a story.
If you have time,
To listen to me.
It takes a few minute’s———- May take a few minutes
Your time wont be wasted
And if you could,——————-So, if you could
Would you lend it to me?


It all starts the same way,——- Tell me a secret
no one can deny this—————And i’ll earn your trust
It always comes to us,
from one special place
A person,a memory,
the love of a lifetime
It always starts out with paper and pen


Talk to me, give me,
some inspiration
Give me some reason
To take it all in
Make me feel happy,
Inspire some magic
I’ll write it all down with paper and pen—- Then we’ll sing together and remember when


I’ll give you wings
If you cant fly
I’ll ease your pains,
If you should cry.
I’ll make you smile,
I’ll make you dance      
I’ll give you the world
If you give me a chance.


Sometimes its a lifetime
Of shear desperation
Sometimes its a love that
Brings peace to your heart
Listen to small things
They speak in a big way
I’ll Write it all down with
Paper and pen

C: J Carl Morris 2016

 
     
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Dec 17, 2016, 02:20 PM

Nice changes

 
     
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Dec 17, 2016, 02:29 PM

well don’t keep us in suspense lol. it’ll probably change again when you sing it :)

 
     
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Dec 17, 2016, 04:30 PM

this has been happening a lot to me lately, what’s going on admin??

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Dec 17, 2016, 08:16 PM

that is so weird…..... those previous posts weren’t there just a while ago…......

i thought you were going to do a basic demo Vet? come on, this is your baby….. lets hear how
this goes in your head first!

 
     
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