Six Feet Deep (Country)

 
       
 
Apr 24, 2017, 12:00 AM

Here’s one I would really love to collaborate on - my singing and playing are not all that great and the arrangement isn’t quite there. I don’t have music for the bridge yet. Looking for collaboration…wouldn’t mind redoing it from scratch if interested.

https://soundcloud.com/ctonyp/more-than-six-feet-deep

More Than Six Feet Deep
© Tony Pistilli 2016

Verse 1:
Gotta “COEXIST” bumper sticker
On the back of my pickup truck
And I pray before eatin’ my dinner.
Go to church when I’m down on my luck
Gotta bobble-headed virgin Mary
On the dashboard to keep me safe
But I lost a tooth in a fender bender
When she flew right into my face

I try to have all my bases covered
But I’m finding out that it just ain’t workin’

Chorus:
What’s it all about
Why do I keep
Breathing in and out
Eat, sleep, repeat
‘Cause I gotta know when I go
That it won’t be….
More than six feet deep

Verse 2:
Gotta hardback Gideon bible
That I stole from the Motel 6
But it’s hard to read all those thee’s and thou’s
My mind’s just a bit too thick
Gotta an extra burger and a French fry
For that guy with the cardboard sign
Then I saw him leave about an hour later
In a car that was better than mine

I try to have all my bases covered
But I’m finding out that it just ain’t workin’

Chorus

Bridge:
I’m scratchin’ my head here ponderin’
About something my granddad said
“You can get it right with the Lord tonight
Or spend the rest of your life still wondering”

Chorus

 
     
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Tony Pistilli Joined Apr 13, 2017
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Apr 29, 2017, 11:04 PM

SongWriting101:

You need to make all the lines of your verses , all the same number of syllables.
You need to make all the lines of your chorus , all the same number of syllables.

The length of verse lines and chorus lines can be different..

You can make some lines shorter , but the music needs to be at a tempo and length of the longest line.
So shorter lines will have music at the end and the next line can start in the timing of the longest line.

Just count the syllables on your fingers as you sing the song. and make sure that each line ends with the same number of syllables.

If a word is stretched out then i add a “~” tilde , symbol for each syllable the word is stretched out to.
All~~ means to stretch out “All” to 3 syllables.
All~~~ means to stretch out “All” to 4 syllables.

 
     
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