shot of jack

 
       
 
Sep 01, 2017, 03:37 PM

like i said, a person wanted some of what i thought was my best songs…


someday the future’s gonna be the past
the days you look back at and laugh
so don’t drown yourself in sorrow
worrying about tomorrow

just kick off your shoes
sit back and relax
wash away the blues
have a shot of jack

does it really matter what someone has
when nothing they have ‘s’ gonna last
and don’t tell me you didn’t know
you can’t take it when you go

just kick off your shoes
sit back and relax
wash away the blues
have a shot of jack

you’re always doing things making you sad
but you’ll change that if you can
instead of going with the flow
you say you’ll be staying home

i know it doesn’t happen over night
don’t go thinking that it might
not here to say i told you so
but i want you out of that hole

just kick off your shoes
sit back and relax
wash away the blues
have a shot of jack

just kick off your shoes
sit back and relax
wash away the blues
have a shot of jack

 
     
dennis dawe Joined Apr 17, 2010
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Sep 01, 2017, 03:40 PM

It’s easier to say than to do… Okay, just joking, it’s really good for a motivational one :D

 
     
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Sep 01, 2017, 06:27 PM

Very well written.
Perfect structure.

Just by reading, I get a melody in my mind.

Very good!

 
     
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Guy E. Trépanier Joined Dec 05, 2005
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Oct 02, 2017, 12:13 PM
Brad De Younge - 28 September 2017 04:40 AM

Re Your Quote GUY

You say perfect structure ???  Sorry to disagree but I think your referring to the syllable

count in each line

To write memorable music to these verses, the Stress of each syllable has to match

each corresponding word line for line and none of these first lines match

The natural stress of multi syllable words


What Denis needs to do is have a melody in his head as he writes each line

Then he stands a chance of writing a professional Lyric

DENIS you need to critique other peoples lyrics that way it should improve your own

I see nothing from you except lyric posting For every lyric you post you should critique

three written by other writers

That The SONGWRITER 101 Guide to posting

first, i’m not on here all the time….all these years i thought denis was spelled with 2 n’s…i have over a 100 albums and liner notes not one has them labeled chorus and verse, are they wrong too or did they figure we’d figure out what was the chorus and the verse…i expect changes to my lyrics…my lyrics are nothing more than ideas for someone to possibly use…i sometimes post about other lyrics…all i see is comments from you…shouldn’t you post your lyrics before making comments on others…

 
     
dennis dawe Joined Apr 17, 2010
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Oct 03, 2017, 06:01 AM

Oh calm down gentlemen…....... what are the new kids going to think?

 
     
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JAPOV Joined Jul 02, 2006
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Oct 04, 2017, 11:54 AM

So:
Best advice I’ve seen here is to take the time to o’pine on 3 other lyrics for every one you post.
Makes sense to call it a learning experience and makes sense if you hope to get input from others.
And if input is offered, and taken, in a positive way.
Like pre partying with water so you are well hydrated
Like participating in a community you want to be part of.
I pre hydrate but don’t offer input.
I am going to try to be a better in-putter.
In-Putter
Thanks
SB

( does this count as one??)

 
     
steven bines Joined Nov 01, 2007
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