if you will

 
       
 
Sep 11, 2017, 01:14 PM

here i am, at the end of my rope
needing hope asking for your help
let me know before i let go
if you will

there you are, my old place having all
living large asking for nothing
hold me close never let go
if you will
if you will

i never dreamed i’d be here
praying for god to appear
not long ago i was here
having nothing to fear

nobody, is lending me a hand
understand i’m an awful mess
i don’t know if i should let go
if i will

it’s not clear, why i became this way
anyway this is where i am
let me know before i let go
if you will
if you will

never dreamed i’d be the one
hoping for someone to come
feeling like i’m almost done
that i would be all alone

let me know before i let go
if you will
if you will

 
     
dennis dawe Joined Apr 17, 2010
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Sep 19, 2017, 07:05 AM

From what you have written its not easy to critique what you have

and I would say try writing Verse Chorus Verse Chorus marking your

work accordingly;

They say that every line you write should point at your title ?, 

The grammar here does not make sense , is English your natural language??

The story is not existent   just a jumble of non sensible lines

Study Hit Songs and copy the Formats

Then you may get others replying to your posts

Hope this helps if not best wishes

Hi All  

I am A Song Writer Performer based in Europe .I also work for a Publisher

and have spent years at E M I of Hayes U K working in A and R plus Artiste

Development.

 
     
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Brad De Younge Joined Aug 19, 2012
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