Pretty Smart Sister

 
       
 
Nov 22, 2017, 12:21 PM

A silly song that just kind of came to me as I was lying in bed. All these questions! I put it up on SoundCloud because I think it’s better heard than read. The vocals will need work, but I thought I’d post the lyrics here first in case I get any good suggestions to incorporate into the final version.

Take a listen here:
https://soundcloud.com/gavin-sinclair-5/pretty-smart-sister/s-2hiyf

I know the title is kind of buried in the chorus, but it seemed like the catchiest phrase and a lot more likely to draw a potential listener than my original tile, “Tell Me.”
 
PRETTY SMART SISTER

Tell me why you can’t put on mascara
With your mouth closed?
Tell me why you think you love me
Tell me why….you don’t

Tell me why….you won’t leave me alone
Tell me why….you’re leaving me
Tell me why….are you still here?
Tell me where….did you go?

CHORUS
So much that’s a mystery, mister
So much that’s crazy as hell
You look like you’re pretty smart, sister
Hey can you tell…
... me…

...what has he got that I haven’t got?
Tell me where….do I get it?
Tell me why….would I want it?
Tell me why….do you?

Tell me why I don’t want to go to bed
Tell me why….I don’t want to get up
Tell me why this song doesn’t rhyme
Tell me why it does some of the time

CHORUS
So much that’s a mystery, mister
So much that’s crazy as hell
You look like you’re pretty smart, sister
I bet you can tell…

...me…

...when….did time start?
Tell me what happens… after it stops
Tell me what lies beyond the edge of space
Tell me who…..made God

And if he made man in his own image
Tell me who made Donald Trump
Tell me why… are your fingers in your ears?
Tell me why….are you crying?

CHORUS
So much that’s a mystery, mister
So much that’s crazy as hell
You look like you’re pretty smart, sister
Hey can you tell…

...me…

... how much is that doggie in the window?
How many puppies are at the pound?
How much do they pay Kim Kardashian?
How old was that boy who drowned?

Tell me what was the best thing before sliced bread?
And the night they drove old Dixie down
Why were all…the people singing
Na na na na na na na na na?

CHORUS
So much that’s a mystery, mister
So much that’s crazy as hell
You look like you’re pretty smart, sister
Hey can you tell… me…why, what, when, who, how

 
     
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Gavin Sinclair Joined Dec 02, 2014
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Nov 22, 2017, 08:25 PM

Havent had a chance to listen yet, but the lyrics are great. All the classic Gavin wit and charm ive come to know is present. My only hang up is in the chorus. I assume you’re talking to a female so the line “whats the mystery mister” kinda throws me off. Maybe “whos the mystery mister”? I like the rhythmic flow with the two words MYStery MISter. Maybe i’m missing something with my Nit. You ARE a clever one after all, probably just went over my head!  :D

 
     
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Brad Jaggard Joined Jun 22, 2016
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Nov 22, 2017, 09:22 PM

Good point about the chorus, Brad. It had occurred to me too. It started out as just a load of questions that could be addressed to anyone, as most of those in the second half could be. Then more of the ones that are addressed to a girl crept in. I’m thinking of changing “you” to “she.” Either that or replace “mystery mister” with something else, which would be a pity since it rolls off the tongue so easily.

I like your idea of “who’s the mystery mister?” However, I’m not so sure about him calling his love interest “sister.”

 
     
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Gavin Sinclair Joined Dec 02, 2014
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Nov 22, 2017, 10:41 PM

Hmmm…. An interesting twist indeed! LOL! Honestly, i wasnt thinking of “sister” as sibling but rather as slang, like “darling” “. sweetheart” or “baby”.

Whatever floats your boat Brother! :P

[ Edited: 22 November 2017 10:57 PM by Brad Jaggard]
 
     
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Nov 29, 2017, 07:18 PM

I updated this in the light of some good advice I got from people over on another forum. I changed the last two verses to something a little better lyrically, although it loses some of the mayhem that was there at the end of the original version. I guess this should be on Tune Topics now, but it started out here so…

Here’s the new version
http://mysteriousbeings.com/portfolio/pretty-smart-sister/

or at SoundCloud
https://soundcloud.com/gavin-sinclair-5/pretty-smart-sister-2

The original is still there as a private link.
https://soundcloud.com/gavin-sinclair-5/pretty-smart-sister/s-2hiyf

Here are those new last verses.
.. how much is that doggie in the window?
How many puppies are at the pound?
How much do they pay Kim Kardashian?
Did you lose this quarter I found?

Tell me who in a firing squad
Wouldn’t aim to miss
Tell me who when a heart is breaking
Would refuse a kiss.

 
     
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