The lie’s the life you lead

 
       
 
Jan 10, 2018, 01:30 PM

The lie’s the life you lead
Verse
Maybe I’m negative.
A pessimist at heart.
Maybe I’ve learned from life.
The way things really are.
Took a wrong turn on the road.
Got mixed up and confused.
Everywhere that I looked
Was nothing but bad news.
Pre chorus
Grew bitter, disillusioned
Took a bite I couldn’t chew.
Grew colder, disenchanted.
Turned around my point of view.
Chorus
Sometimes we get turned around
Things aren’t the way they seem.
The truth is what you believe.
The lie’s the life you lead.
Verse
Maybe I’m depressing.
A fatalist at heart.
Maybe I’ve learned from death.
That faith’s a dying art.
Took the long way and I learned
Got caught up in deceit.
Everywhere I looked
Were people who would cheat.
Pre chorus
Grew bitter, disillusioned
Took a bite I couldn’t chew.
Grew colder, disenchanted.
Turned around my point of view.
Chorus
Sometimes we get turned around
Things aren’t the way they seem.
The truth is what you believe.
The lie’s the life you lead.
Bridge
Berate me if you will, Take your happy pill.
Deceive yourself, deceive yourself
Take your happy pill.

[ Edited: 11 January 2018 01:26 PM by carroll kiphen]
 
     
carroll kiphen Joined Feb 22, 2016
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Jan 11, 2018, 12:48 PM

I just stumbled onto this lyric and was impressed, which I seldom seem to be about much of what I see on SW101. I’m still digesting your content/message, but I thought the song structure and craftsmanship was way better than average.

I’m surprised that you haven’t gotten any feedback on this. Nicely done.

 
     
Jeffrey Walker Joined May 25, 2017
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Jan 11, 2018, 12:56 PM

Caroll, may I also make a little suggestion? The chorus is so great, but if you inserted a couple of syllables, it wouldn’t change the meaning at all and it might make the meter flow a little more “catchily” and make it easier on the vocalist to deliver the lines.

Like”

Sometimes we just get turned around
Things aren’t the way they seem.
The truth is that which you believe.
The lie’s the life you lead.

That gives you the “da DA da DA da DA da DA” meter on lines one and three and each of those is followed on the shorter lines two and four with meter that goes “da DA da Da da DA”. Just an idea.

Have you put this to music? I’d love to hear it if you have.

Cheers,
Jeff

 
     
Jeffrey Walker Joined May 25, 2017
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Jan 11, 2018, 01:28 PM

Ok I Took your suggestion on the chorus. I’m not a musician so I have to rely on others to put my lyrics to music and sing them.  Glad you liked it!

 
     
carroll kiphen Joined Feb 22, 2016
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Jan 11, 2018, 03:39 PM

i don’t know if this work or not, if you even like it…here’s my take


maybe you’re negative
maybe i’ve learned from life
look at things from all sides

if you open your eyes
you won’t miss things to see
you won’t be standing by

don’t be delusional
don’t be dissatisfied

no need to hang you’re head
there’s better days ahead
no matter what they said

i found you not playing
maybe you’re depressing
finishing moaning

don’t be delusional
don’t be dissatisfied

you won’t know what’s ahead
if you bury your’e head
you’ll find things aren’t dead

i know you’re feeling bad
you think everything’s sad
never seeing the glad

it’s not too late
to change your fate

don’t be delusional
don’t be dissatisfied

 
     
dennis dawe Joined Apr 17, 2010
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Jan 11, 2018, 04:10 PM

Yep, good one Carroll!

 
     
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