Zombie

 
       
 
Mar 22, 2018, 04:34 PM

She was walking one arm broken
Crooked hair and shirt undone
Someone said “hey there cutie”
Try to walk if you can’t run.

Isn’t this so fun?
Nothing really matters
No no no

someone said….....zombies.
Nothing left but zombies


Look for losers… Cheaters, users.
Lucky ones left behind.
Everyone knows….hurt shows….
I see yours and you see mine

Well that’s fine….
Everything in tatters….
No no no

someone said…
HEY….zombie!
Nothing left but zombies.

Crashing cars, streets on fire
Looked around….reached for them
Build another dead empire
Hear the cries….feel the wind

I will be your friend…
Not good enough…
No no no

someone said….
HEY…..zombies.
Nothing left but zombies.

You were the one….
Too good to die
Here comes the sun….
we don’t ask why
Nothing left but
Zombies….

[ Edited: 28 March 2018 08:45 PM by joseph f mcmanus]
 
     
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Mar 28, 2018, 07:24 PM

Hello Joseph,

Welcome to SW101.  What genre are you doing this lyric in?  I notice the structure is somewhat loose, it is hard to determine verse chorus or bridge.  You do have rhyme in places, and not so much in others.  Try separating the verses from the chorus, and you might consider posting this in the Lyrics Library, you may get more feedback there.  Do you sing, play an instrument?  Good luck and best wishes,

Speak soon,

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Mar 28, 2018, 08:31 PM

Ok will separate verse and chorus.  With some kind o bridge

 
     
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