What’s next to me

 
       
 
Apr 03, 2018, 07:56 AM

I’m afraid it’s only a “lyrics video” (i.e. no video at all). Slow blues (I guess). I actually only ‘produced’ it so I could play the solo because of its sound:

https://youtu.be/YPrgG4-cPI4

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Bernd Harmsen Joined May 31, 2009
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Apr 03, 2018, 06:13 PM

That is a cool guitar solo, Bernd. Quick suggestion on the lyrics to do with improving the feel of the English a little.

1. Change “I keep lost” to “I stay lost.” (You can keep doing something, but without the -ing word, you can’t really use “keep”)
2. Change “It’s been a wile that things felt right, that we made love or talked all night” to “It’s been a wile since things felt right, since we made love or talked all night”

Love the switch from “what’s” to “who’s” at the end and before that the line “I’ve grown apart from her and me.”

The lyrics are great. The music couldn’t be much more different, but the sentiment made me think of my favorite Reinhard Mey song and one of my top 10 songs in any language, “Wir.” Almost brings me to tears every time. I don’t know of any more beautifully sad song. One of those I would have given my right arm to have written.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3wJ2m0BoO0M

 
     
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Apr 04, 2018, 06:47 AM

Thank you, Gavin, for your corrections. Next time I sing it I will change the expressions.

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Bernd

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