Falling Sky - Alternative Rock Song Idea

 
       
 
Apr 28, 2018, 06:12 PM

Hi all,

Working on a new song idea.  Wrote the 1st verse and chorus.  Before I continue, feedback is most welcome on what I have.  Also feedback on if I should add a solo or leave the mid part as an instrumental break.

Thanks in advance and rock on!

FALLING SKY
(Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton)

Tonnes of steel
Hid in a hole
Mankind
Out of control
14,000
Ways to die
Button pressed
And blown sky high

Dodged bullets of extinction
Now you’re obsessed with

Jurisdiction
Your conviction
Nationize
Human demise

You keep the scouring
Miss the warning
Only realize
When the sky is
Falling!
When the sky is
Falling!
Falling!

 
     
Jonathan Linton Joined Jul 20, 2014
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Apr 29, 2018, 05:18 AM

Updated demo:

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/falling-sky-v2

 
     
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Apr 29, 2018, 01:48 PM

Further update - solo added and remix:

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/falling-sky-v3

 
     
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Apr 29, 2018, 04:46 PM

Dude! I’m loving this! Seriously! I was going to suggest some lyric tweaks but I think folks here are getting bored with my “bias” lol. ROCKIN IT!

 
     
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May 02, 2018, 06:26 AM

Hi Jonathan. Very cool. Man I love your voice (and, of course, your mean guitar).
I find myself hung up on the lyric, “who gave you the right to decide mankind’s plight.” Is plight the right word there?

I’m liking the instrumental break. You could add a solo, but personally, I don’t think you need one.

Enjoyed that. Thanks for posting.  :)

Jen

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“One good thing about music, when it hits you, you feel no pain”
- Bob Marley

 
     
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May 02, 2018, 07:30 AM
Jenny Stokes - 02 May 2018 06:26 AM

Hi Jonathan. Very cool. Man I love your voice (and, of course, your mean guitar).
I find myself hung up on the lyric, “who gave you the right to decide mankind’s plight.” Is plight the right word there?

I’m liking the instrumental break. You could add a solo, but personally, I don’t think you need one.

Enjoyed that. Thanks for posting.  :)

Jen

Hi Jen,

Thanks for the feedback!  I did add a solo in V3 - I am interested in your opinions on if it added anything: https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/falling-sky-v3

Regarding plight, I chose this word instead of say “fate”, but made me thing.  Plight’s definition is “a dangerous, difficult, or otherwise unfortunate situation.” - don’t you think this fits?  Interested in your opinion there…

 
     
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May 02, 2018, 07:31 AM
JAPOV - 29 April 2018 04:46 PM

Dude! I’m loving this! Seriously! I was going to suggest some lyric tweaks but I think folks here are getting bored with my “bias” lol. ROCKIN IT!

Hi JAPOV,

We are all bias, man, including me!  Thats what opinions are, and that all I ask for.  And each opinion is a gift that you should appreciate, even if you don’t agree with it.

 
     
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May 22, 2018, 09:37 PM

Good tune. I like the solo.

” I’m just a guy with a Guitar”
      BC Caster

 
     
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May 23, 2018, 11:49 AM

I like the song and the solo fits. Well played! You might try expanding the bass and drums breakdown section right after the solo to build a little more tension before the guitars come back in. You could even do a spoken word thing over it. The live version of U2’s Bullet in the Blue Sky comes to mind… but those are all arrangement details. You’ve got a solid tune there and I’m sure you’ll get it sorted.

 
     
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