Swipe Right (studio)

 
       
 
May 15, 2018, 08:28 AM

I posted a live early version of this a short while ago and took on board some of the helpful advice to improve the song. Recorded using a Boss BR 80 digital recorder. As always the vocals are iffy to say the least. Let me know what you think what you like about the song and any changes you think would benefit it

Lyrics

Summers here again
Should be out with your friends
Been two days since he wanted space
and a week since he saw your face
Swipe right here I am
I wanna hear about all your plans
How you’re gonna live by the sea
How you’re just the same as me

Chorus

Don’t you know i’m out here too
Scratching around for someone like you
Here come our sliding doors
Give me faith in this town once more

Second verse

I’ll dry the tears that you’ve tasted
if you roll back the years that I wasted
I know i’ll only let you down
But i’ll always want you around
Swipe right here I am
I wanna tell you about all my plans
How i’m gonna live by the sea
How i’m gonna sing good to be free

Chorus

https://soundcloud.com/realkevm2/swipe-right

 
     
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RealKevM Joined Jan 12, 2018
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May 18, 2018, 08:53 AM

Hey Kev, good to see you back here.

i listened on SoundCloud and wasn’t really able to identify what you had changed from the original version you posted here. Can you tell me?

 
     
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Gavin Sinclair Joined Dec 02, 2014
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May 19, 2018, 09:44 AM

Hi mate, yeah this new version is recorded using my digital recorder so its a lot clearer produced and the phrasing is different - maybe not that much of a difference as I think lol

 
     
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May 21, 2018, 06:58 PM

Yes, to be honest, I still think you need more variation between verse and chorus. Of course, that’s just me, but my opinion is all I have to offer, and I don’t see anyone else jumping in to offer suggestions.

 
     
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Gavin Sinclair Joined Dec 02, 2014
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May 22, 2018, 02:25 AM

No I appreciate you listening and taking the time to share your thoughts.
The ‘swipe right’ bit in the song isn’t the chorus I don’t know if people think it is because of the title (others have said the same as you) or i’m a bit tone deaf and you are on about the actual chorus lol

 
     
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RealKevM Joined Jan 12, 2018
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May 22, 2018, 11:09 AM

Cool song! I think the ‘swipe right’ bit is stronger than your chorus. Maybe you could use the existing chorus as a bridge. I also think the song could use some dynamics even if it’s just hitting the guitar harder on the chorus or clicking on a distortion pedal. It might also sound good to break up the string of 1/8th notes here and there. I can hear a lot of arrangement ideas. Are you going to do a band demo?

 
     
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May 23, 2018, 04:32 PM
LoRez - 22 May 2018 11:09 AM

Cool song! I think the ‘swipe right’ bit is stronger than your chorus. Maybe you could use the existing chorus as a bridge. I also think the song could use some dynamics even if it’s just hitting the guitar harder on the chorus or clicking on a distortion pedal. It might also sound good to break up the string of 1/8th notes here and there. I can hear a lot of arrangement ideas. Are you going to do a band demo?

Cheers, yeah I do need to add dynamics or something to make things stand out, good suggestion thank you :)
If I can figure out how to program drums on my recorder thing I would do a band demo lol

 
     
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Jun 03, 2018, 06:31 AM

For anyone keeping track of this songs progress (if anyone! lol) I performed it live last weekend at the Springboard Festival https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MajCzbXQfoQ

 
     
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